Hands-On Fundraising

Donor Communications

  • About
  • Hands-On Fundraising Blog
  • Services
  • Contact
You are here: Home / Blog / Looking for attention? Why the details matter

Looking for attention? Why the details matter

It’s almost that time of year again.

Your mailbox and inbox are probably getting as crowded as mine are. Appeals from organizations you’ve supported. And appeals from new organizations, hoping to grab your attention.

It’s overwhelming to you, a professional. Imagine how it feels to your kind donors.

Plus, we’re living in an age of constant attention-seeking. The competition is fierce, from the latest on TikTok to the latest news. Attention is currency.

But there are many ways to grab someone’s attention. And not all of them are good.

How can you stand out in the crowd in a way that draws supporters to you?

Good attention and not-so-good attention

Imagine:

You’re at a four-way stop when someone blasts through the intersection without even pausing. That car certainly grabbed your attention. Your heart is beating faster. You may have offered a gesture as they blew by.

That’s attention, all right. But not the good kind. Not the kind that makes you want to know the person driving that car.

Now imagine, instead:

You’re at a party. And a friend of a friend is sharing a story.

Immediately, your ears perk up because humans love stories. And this person is an engaging storyteller. She has your attention.

So when you learn the story is about someone in your community. Someone who just lost their home to a fire, you’re ready to help.

Which kind of attention does your organization need?

You’re ready to help because the need was expressed in a way you wanted to accept it. (A story) You’re ready because you already trust the storyteller. And you’re ready because this is something that happened in your community.

That’s the attention you want from your donors or prospective donors.

What does your organization offer that’s unique?

If you only tell but don’t show why your organization is the one to trust, you’ll have a hard time raising money. Good stories do both.

So, how can you stand out?

This is why the little things matter. And by “little things,” I mean details and specificity. What language are you using to describe your organization’s work?

Next time you have a heavy mail day at home, open them all and skim the appeals. My bet is you’ll find a lot of general language that doesn’t mean much. “Help us serve our community”, for instance. Without details, that means nothing, right?

So, how do you talk about your work?

Remember that your readers do not have the depth of knowledge you do about your organization’s work. If you have a recognized name, they’ll have some idea… but it’s probably not nearly as formed as you might hope.

Zoom in… details can make all the difference

Get specific. Use stories. Use details.

Maybe for you, “we’re a food bank” unlocks a wealth of associations. You understand everything that happens, from sourcing food to stocking it, to how you bring it to people or pantries. But your donors likely do not have your understanding.

So take them with you. Bring them to what you do and show them. This is where small details, like the taste or scent or feel of something, can be the difference between the attention your donor happily gives and donor boredom.

A hungry person walks into your soup kitchen and is greeted by the scent of chicken soup. It reminds her of the soup her mother made.

Or a customer at the pantry leaves, astounded by how heavy the bag in his arms feels. It’s been so long since he didn’t have to worry about his next meal!

What are the small, unique, human details that make your work clear? The ones that take it to a personal level? What can you use to connect your donors to your mission?

Share this:

  • Click to email a link to a friend (Opens in new window) Email
  • Click to share on LinkedIn (Opens in new window) LinkedIn
  • Click to share on Bluesky (Opens in new window) Bluesky
  • Click to share on Mastodon (Opens in new window) Mastodon
  • Click to share on Reddit (Opens in new window) Reddit
  • Click to share on Facebook (Opens in new window) Facebook
  • Click to share on Pinterest (Opens in new window) Pinterest
  • Click to share on Tumblr (Opens in new window) Tumblr
  • More
  • Click to share on WhatsApp (Opens in new window) WhatsApp
  • Click to share on Telegram (Opens in new window) Telegram

Related

Filed Under: Blog, Donor communications Tagged With: appeal writing, attention, details Leave a Comment

Fundraising advice served fresh to your inbox

Get yours here:

Privacy & Cookies: This site uses cookies. By continuing to use this website, you agree to their use.

To find out more, including how to control cookies, see here: Cookie Policy

Leave a ReplyCancel reply

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.

Fundraising advice served fresh to your inbox

Get yours here:

Search

Recent Posts

  • Looking for attention? Why the details matter
  • This is why you can’t find a great development director
  • The new way to fundraise? Trust your mail.
  • Donor identity: How do your donors see themselves?
  • 12 human quirks you can use to fundraise better

Work with me!

Let's talk about how I can help your organization raise more money.

Contact

  • Donor communications
  • Fundraising Strategy

Copyright © 2025 · Mary Cahalane · Hands-On Fundraising · 847 S. Main Street · #183 · Plantsville, CT 06479